Alternate Lyrics Options

[Badman]

Hi everyone, I was listening to V alot lately trying to learn to like every part of it (It is working!) but I can't help but think some of the lyrics were a little uninspired/quickly thrown together. I understand the rappy sound permits for nonsense lyrics as long as the beat is good but why can't we have both? I was thinking over one of the worst violaters, Like a Soldier, and I wrote new lyrics to it that I believe make more sense. Some parts of it still need help like if the rap part at the end could be redone but I cannot come up with anything to fill it .

My favourite part of my version is


and if you follow me
I'll lead you back again
to return everything we stood for


I'll post the original first then I'll post mine with the changes


I just come down from the mountain
a happy man
turned on the television, should of chewed off my hand
i'm sick of all the false glory
"in god we trust"
show me one dollar bill that hasn't passed through the cuss

and if you break my will
i will come back again
to destroy everything you stood for
oh!

i will go on
like a soldier
through the storms of love
and i
take you back, take you away from here
my friend
and charge you up again

we just come down from the mountain
where the breezes were blowin
and everything was growin
like some tree in the bush
still i gotta live my life here
with some pretty scary bretheren
but now i'm a rebel on a mission baby
to live and die by my smile

and if you break my will
i will come back again
to destroy everything you stood for
oh yeah!

i will go on
like a soldier
through the storms of love
and i
take you back, take you away from here
my friend
and charge you up again
charge you up again
charge you up again, yeah

let's go to ray's, not to pizza hut
let's go to the pig, not to starbux
let's vote for nader, what are we waitin for?
i'm gonna live to be a hundred and sixty four
to the crib then back to the studio
to write a song so good
make a midget grow
from the north pole, down to mexico
if you don't know the words, fuck it!
let's go!


Pretty good already... but with lyrics like "Passed through the cuss" and "chewed off my hand" it made me wonder.

I just come down from the mountain
A peaceful heart
turned on the television, and it
tore me apart
I'm sick of all the false glory
What do we need?
one more dollar bill to fuel
our insatiatiable greed?

And if you follow me
I'll lead you back again
to return everything we stood for
Oh!

I will go on
Like a soldier
through the storms of love
and I
take you back, take you away from here
my friend
and show you peace again

We just come down from the mountain
Where the breezes were blowin'
and everything was growin'
like moss on a tree
But still I gotta live my life here
with some pretty scary bretheren
But now I'm a rebel on a misson baby
To live and die in my style

and if you follow me
I'll lead you back again
to return everything we stood for
Oh Yeah!

I will go on
like a soldier
through the storms of love
and I
take you back, take you away from here
my friend
and show you peace again
show you peace again
show you peace again, yeah

(Omit Rap Part)


Give my version a try while listening to the song I'd like feedback! Also, if anyone out there has a song they think needs a lyric changed to something more obvious I'd like to hear about it because I'm open to things like that.

[Badman]

Thanks to everyone who liked my lyrics! It didn't take alot of time to create because it kinda flowed cept the rap part. I didn't figure I'd receive much positive feedback considering I've never written lyrics before and I just put what sounded good and what I felt "stood for" Live. I don't think the original lyrics or much of the first half of V really stood for Live.

I might start to redo lyrics on another song but probably not "Flow." That song is hard to work with.

I would really like to see others do something like this

[HiItsNino]

I go back and forth with V, sometimes I think its great and like it alot as it is. Other times I'll listen to it and think they should have spent a little more time on it. All I do know is its nice clean sounding music without being typical or boring. It goes a lot of places and thats cool.

I have alternat lyrics for Century - instead of "puke stinks like beer" I sing "mystery is near"..kinda stole it from flow - which I think is a kick ass song that should open their shows.

[Existentialist]

I go back and forth with V, sometimes I think its great and like it alot as it is. Other times I'll listen to it and think they should have spent a little more time on it. All I do know is its nice clean sounding music without being typical or boring. It goes a lot of places and thats cool.

I have alternat lyrics for Century - instead of "puke stinks like beer" I sing "mystery is near"..kinda stole it from flow - which I think is a kick ass song that should open their shows.

I like the LAS alternate lyrics, but leave Century alone. Your version jives with the melody and rhymes with the preceding line, but makes no sense in the context of the song. That puke stinks like beer line is crucial to the meaning of the song. Seriously.